I remember doing these, and they are tough. It is interesting that the wince is the means by which the fears are no longer hidden or silent. The view of drivers sitting behind airbags is a great one, showing that the protagonist does not see the car as a whole, but as safety parts. The wrist grimacing is a great way to show that the protagonist is on a motorcycle here. I think you did really well!
summer is a zipper
latching metal teeth interlock and sound like a fly passing your ear. hovering like drones around a picnic of stale bread, the remains of a summer day spread out on bright grass speckled with red wine. his zip is down and her cheek rounds out like her tongue is pressed against the red flesh. choking while the sun sets her eyelids fill with tear drops and memories of a gun on the same skin i hear it go off in my head and the birds around us flap their wings in fear as they take off into